Comments for Screenplay Readers http://screenplayreaders.com Script coverage, screenplay analysis, and screenwriting resources Sat, 14 Jan 2012 20:40:04 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 Comment on Writer Beware: Buying “Access” to Studio Execs and Agents by MARK11 http://screenplayreaders.com/script-coverage/buying-access-studios-agents/#comment-575 MARK11 Sat, 14 Jan 2012 20:40:04 +0000 http://screenplayreaders.com/?p=1793#comment-575 BABZ! You've just buzzed me for life! Sooo much of your podcast is spot on. And this comes from a grad film school alum of one of the big 3; with a few low, low, low budget specs sold out of film school (big learning curve on those); crewing on indie features to really know more about what producers and directors want and NEED out of a script, every day on the set. Currently in meets and greets with 3 different prodcos, scheduled for the Santa B. film fest on a few projects; shooting a trailer for another feature for some investors as director-writer; and rewriting, rewriting other specs in various genres. I've learned more about my work from tough criticism, than I ever have from a pat on the back. Keep up the pods...will not miss a one. Really loved the discussion on A CHRISTMAS CAROL. You nailed it. BABZ! You’ve just buzzed me for life! Sooo much of your podcast is spot on. And this comes from a grad film school alum of one of the big 3; with a few low, low, low budget specs sold out of film school (big learning curve on those); crewing on indie features to really know more about what producers and directors want and NEED out of a script, every day on the set.

Currently in meets and greets with 3 different prodcos, scheduled for the Santa B. film fest on a few projects; shooting a trailer for another feature for some investors as director-writer; and rewriting, rewriting other specs in various genres. I’ve learned more about my work from tough criticism, than I ever have from a pat on the back.

Keep up the pods…will not miss a one. Really loved the discussion on A CHRISTMAS CAROL. You nailed it.

]]> Comment on First 10 Pages – Jingoist by J. Russell by J Russell http://screenplayreaders.com/first-ten-pages/jingoist/#comment-572 J Russell Tue, 10 Jan 2012 18:39:47 +0000 http://screenplayreaders.com/?p=1854#comment-572 Thanks, I benefitted in two ways from this review. One, I wasn't sure rather to go with a VO or a SUPER for the backstory. I don't want anybody getting lost so I'll try the latter. And two, highlighting that killing the Alterians won't stop the collision is a good point. I'll have to create a reason for them to die. All of the questions have answers. I'm sure as a script reader/writer you know that are "not clear" or the audience is "not informed why" because they are to set up for "Ahh Ha" moments. Beyond the ten it all ties together. Thanks again for the eye opener. Thanks, I benefitted in two ways from this review. One, I wasn’t sure rather to go with a VO or a SUPER for the backstory. I don’t want anybody getting lost so I’ll try the latter. And two, highlighting that killing the Alterians won’t stop the collision is a good point. I’ll have to create a reason for them to die.
All of the questions have answers. I’m sure as a script reader/writer you know that are “not clear” or the audience is “not informed why” because they are to set up for “Ahh Ha” moments. Beyond the ten it all ties together.
Thanks again for the eye opener.

]]> Comment on First 10 Pages – Jingoist by J. Russell by J Russell http://screenplayreaders.com/first-ten-pages/jingoist/#comment-571 J Russell Tue, 10 Jan 2012 18:37:24 +0000 http://screenplayreaders.com/?p=1854#comment-571 Thanks, I benefitted in two ways from this review. One, I wasn't sure rather to go with a VO or a SUPER for the backstory. I don't want anybody getting lost so I'll try the latter. And two, highlighting that killing the Alterians won't stop the collision is a good point. I'll have to create a reason for them to die. All of the questions have answers. I'm sure as a script reader/writer you know they are "not clear" or the audience is "not informed why" because they are to set up for "Ahh Ha" moments. Beyond the ten it all ties together. Thanks again for the eye opener. Thanks, I benefitted in two ways from this review. One, I wasn’t sure rather to go with a VO or a SUPER for the backstory. I don’t want anybody getting lost so I’ll try the latter. And two, highlighting that killing the Alterians won’t stop the collision is a good point. I’ll have to create a reason for them to die.
All of the questions have answers. I’m sure as a script reader/writer you know they are “not clear” or the audience is “not informed why” because they are to set up for “Ahh Ha” moments. Beyond the ten it all ties together.
Thanks again for the eye opener.

]]> Comment on Writer Beware: Buying “Access” to Studio Execs and Agents by Babz, Agent, Host of Babzbuzz http://screenplayreaders.com/script-coverage/buying-access-studios-agents/#comment-547 Babz, Agent, Host of Babzbuzz Fri, 16 Dec 2011 18:29:30 +0000 http://screenplayreaders.com/?p=1793#comment-547 holla!!!! holla!!!!

]]> Comment on Field Guide to Spotting Screenwriters In The Wild (Part One) by Field Guide to Spotting Screenwriters In The Wild (Part Two) | Screenplay Readers http://screenplayreaders.com/script-tips/screenwriter-types-1/#comment-527 Field Guide to Spotting Screenwriters In The Wild (Part Two) | Screenplay Readers Tue, 22 Nov 2011 17:04:07 +0000 http://screenplayreaders.com/?p=1656#comment-527 [...] my Field Guide To Spotting Screenwriters In The Wild (Part One), I was able to classify several major species of screenwriters you may encounter in their natural [...] [...] my Field Guide To Spotting Screenwriters In The Wild (Part One), I was able to classify several major species of screenwriters you may encounter in their natural [...]

]]> Comment on First 10 Pages – Prince Anton & The Pearl Oyster by B. Luke by Brighton http://screenplayreaders.com/first-ten-pages/prince-anton/#comment-518 Brighton Tue, 15 Nov 2011 22:14:12 +0000 http://screenplayreaders.com/?p=1596#comment-518 Thank you for the feedback, I had been debating on if the map part would have that effect or not, so it was useful to know that it's as unclear as I worried it might be. And the rest of your feedback made me realize that I had been so busy trying to introduce all the main players that I neglected to introduce the protagonists goal (which doing so I hope would make it clearer which character that is) as early as I should have. Do you have any suggestions on how to jump around less but still lay out all the pieces that will eventually come together later in the story? Because I've heard that before on other things I've done that I jump around too much but apparently have not yet found how to fix it. Anyway, thank you again. Thank you for the feedback, I had been debating on if the map part would have that effect or not, so it was useful to know that it’s as unclear as I worried it might be. And the rest of your feedback made me realize that I had been so busy trying to introduce all the main players that I neglected to introduce the protagonists goal (which doing so I hope would make it clearer which character that is) as early as I should have.
Do you have any suggestions on how to jump around less but still lay out all the pieces that will eventually come together later in the story? Because I’ve heard that before on other things I’ve done that I jump around too much but apparently have not yet found how to fix it.
Anyway, thank you again.

]]> Comment on First 10 Pages – The Agent by J. Duncan by James http://screenplayreaders.com/first-ten-pages/the-agent-by-j-duncan/#comment-517 James Mon, 14 Nov 2011 20:52:54 +0000 http://screenplayreaders.com/?p=1570#comment-517 A lot of the things you mentioned, such as the inconsistencies or holes in the story, I realised after submitting and have since changed. I tried not to reveal too much in the first 10 pages, but looking back I agree that it doesn't tell you much about the character and his story etc. Thanks a lot and this really is a great service you offer. A lot of the things you mentioned, such as the inconsistencies or holes in the story, I realised after submitting and have since changed. I tried not to reveal too much in the first 10 pages, but looking back I agree that it doesn’t tell you much about the character and his story etc.

Thanks a lot and this really is a great service you offer.

]]> Comment on First 10 Pages – Level Z by B. Blake and T. Madrigal by Brandon http://screenplayreaders.com/first-ten-pages/level-z-by-b-blake-and-t-madrigal/#comment-512 Brandon Sun, 13 Nov 2011 04:13:43 +0000 http://screenplayreaders.com/?p=1574#comment-512 I truly appreciate that you took the time to read the first 10 of LEVEL Z. I also appreciate the honesty given regarding the project. I can see your point or suggestion that their is something missing in Kat's reaction to her parents being killed. Once again, thank you for taking the time to read through it. I truly appreciate that you took the time to read the first 10 of LEVEL Z. I also appreciate the honesty given regarding the project. I can see your point or suggestion that their is something missing in Kat’s reaction to her parents being killed.

Once again, thank you for taking the time to read through it.

]]> Comment on First 10 Pages – The Craze by D. Rushlow by Derek http://screenplayreaders.com/first-ten-pages/the-craze-by-d-rushlow/#comment-498 Derek Wed, 09 Nov 2011 22:54:39 +0000 http://screenplayreaders.com/?p=1438#comment-498 Thanks for the feedback, Brian! Glad you enjoyed it. :) -Derek Thanks for the feedback, Brian! Glad you enjoyed it. :)

-Derek

]]> Comment on Shooting The Messenger – How to Not Be A Dick When Getting Paid Script Feedback by Marquese Clack http://screenplayreaders.com/script-coverage/shooting-the-messenger-how-to-not-be-a-dick-when-getting-paid-script-feedback/#comment-482 Marquese Clack Sat, 05 Nov 2011 17:53:52 +0000 http://screenplayreaders.com/?p=1345#comment-482 I completely and wholeheartedly agree. I remember getting my first script coverage. It hurt like pissed off ex-girlfriend who slept with your best friend. Not that it's ever happened to me. But I agree one should take a deep breath before writing that angry email to a reader. Just like a police officer, they're just doing their job. Unless you're in New York or Fullerton, California. Then it would be okay to be upset with them. I completely and wholeheartedly agree. I remember getting my first script coverage. It hurt like pissed off ex-girlfriend who slept with your best friend. Not that it’s ever happened to me. But I agree one should take a deep breath before writing that angry email to a reader. Just like a police officer, they’re just doing their job. Unless you’re in New York or Fullerton, California. Then it would be okay to be upset with them.

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